You told me to crit you in comments, so I'm gunna, by god. For this one, I'd say the asymmetry in the cameras is working, as it gives an air of chaos (though limited) and being all seeing. It's not working in the figures so mush, though. If they were an equal distance from Winston (oh snap, I've read the book), it would look better compositionally, I think. Also, the one camera hitting the edge of the man on the left's head and shoulder is driving me nuts. I'd back it off enough to avoid the head, at least.
Also, watch your perspective. Some of the lense parts of the cameras are at different angles than the camera themselves. If this is intentional, I'd emphasize it, but if not, use some of those nifty rulers in Illustrator. They're fun.
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You told me to crit you in comments, so I'm gunna, by god. For this one, I'd say the asymmetry in the cameras is working, as it gives an air of chaos (though limited) and being all seeing. It's not working in the figures so mush, though. If they were an equal distance from Winston (oh snap, I've read the book), it would look better compositionally, I think. Also, the one camera hitting the edge of the man on the left's head and shoulder is driving me nuts. I'd back it off enough to avoid the head, at least.
ReplyDeleteAlso, watch your perspective. Some of the lense parts of the cameras are at different angles than the camera themselves. If this is intentional, I'd emphasize it, but if not, use some of those nifty rulers in Illustrator. They're fun.